Our day in spring Festival by Chinedu
It was a sunny afternoon and my family was ready to go to the Spring Festival. My dad came with a blue shirt on and took us (without the car) a soccer field, where the festival was. Then we went to a bigger soccer field where mostly everyone was, my brother kachi started crying and my parents told me to take him to the bouncing Titanic and Zoo. So I took him there and removed his shoes, first he was scared and then we came off. We put on our shoes and went to play soccer, it was much better for him. After there wasn’t anything to do, so I took Kachi again to the bouncing Zoo and this time he agreed to play and play and play. I was with him until my dad came with the twins and told me that Kachi and I had to go and eat dinner Kachi didn’t want to come, so I went to get food to eat. When I came back, my dad told me to say with my twin brothers, while he got his own food. Then stayed until my dad came. We both sat near the pushchair, then my mum and uncle Razac came and we ate together. When we finished we released the twins to get their energy back. So dad and I followed each on of them.
Then an announcement came that there was going to be a game. So we went up (the twins were in the pushchair) to the big soccer field and watch all the games. At that time Shawn and Kachi were out while Joel was in the pushchair, we ate popcorn and drank Pepsi. Then the awards came and uncle Razac won a prize! He was in the last game. When we saw the award and everything we went on uncle Razac’s car and he drove the whole of my family home to our house.
You all remember chinedu,well he is my first son,he writes all the post in the Chinedu’s Essay category of this blog.He is a Grade 6 student.
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Posted By 
tyna 
May 29, 2008 
WHAT?! a 6th grade writes that good? I studied English at the second biggest university in Indonesia but not even write better than him at any point. How do you raise him, Tyna? I want my son to be bright too…
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Ojrak,I told him to write an essay about every outing,events,vacations we took.It was not
easy at first but with a little push,loads
of encouragments and of course some shouting
he improved.I think he is enjoying it now.
I also bought “HOOKED ON PHONICS” stages 1-5
for him about 4 years ago,reading the story books
in that set helped him alot.I will check for their
site and send it to you.
good piece of narration, chinedu.
well done. well done. well done.
more ink to your pen…more prose to your writing;
more power to your elbow.
your narrative is getting well-grounded;
try to make it quite descriptive as you progress.
you’re grooming a brilliant writer in the making.
catch the dream…catch ‘em young!
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